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Everett H Young's avatar

An unexpected minute of delight. I didn’t know you wrote poetry! That was really enjoyable and worth a second read!

DLJohnson's avatar

I thought it was actually pretty good!

BJ Roberts's avatar

Musing missives

Matt Kilby's avatar

Excellent work!

Frederic Poag's avatar

Thank you sir! :D

Kevin Lawrence's avatar

Well done. very sensory and drew me right in. thank you.

Anne's avatar

I found the 'just so' at the end of each line early in the poem, very irritating, would be better with a more judicious use of the phrase. It looses its impact with the repetition.